tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post205321731168882277..comments2023-05-24T09:45:52.821-05:00Comments on Title Magic: Fixing a FlatSavanna Kougarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-67088442603397736042011-10-01T16:30:35.850-05:002011-10-01T16:30:35.850-05:00Pat, that makes more sense from where I sit.
And...Pat, that makes more sense from where I sit. <br /><br />And, you're welcome.Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-23241325363101262972011-10-01T15:03:42.959-05:002011-10-01T15:03:42.959-05:00Oh, and thanks for reposting my Aztec pic! Looks g...Oh, and thanks for reposting my Aztec pic! Looks good!Pat C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10531462055912377327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-67764900538811580592011-10-01T15:02:27.576-05:002011-10-01T15:02:27.576-05:00I think I may have come up with an answer. The pla...I think I may have come up with an answer. The plan the male lead comes up with is unexpected because it goes against his character as presented in the story. However, it would be right in character for the female lead. If she's the one who comes up with the plan, that gives her more control over the situation and makes her less of a victim. The male lead adds the bit about the third party. He's got a grudge against the third party, and he wants the bad guy stopped; why not kill two birds with one stone and let them slug it out? If either or both of them dies, the male lead still comes out ahead. I'm going to rewrite the scene that way and see if it works better. It already feels better to me. I should learn to trust my subconscious.Pat C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10531462055912377327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-73473477352401604362011-09-30T15:02:59.916-05:002011-09-30T15:02:59.916-05:00Hmmm, that could be what's niggling at you, ho...Hmmm, that could be what's niggling at you, how the bad guy is handled. Okay, so your heroine couldn't win... what if she tries and the hero saves her, and together they win?Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-22051151522088960282011-09-30T15:00:55.965-05:002011-09-30T15:00:55.965-05:00Pat, I did see that blog and read it. It was good ...Pat, I did see that blog and read it. It was good and educational. At the same time, I'm not up to joining a spanking site right now to see how they handle their serial stories, as far as titles, etc. <br /><br />Not that I'm against the erotic use of spanking... not at all! I just don't care for how its presented in some stories, or the attitudes behind it.Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-42913033350755541832011-09-30T14:02:25.315-05:002011-09-30T14:02:25.315-05:00Oh, and I've still got your story. I meant to ...Oh, and I've still got your story. I meant to send my comments, but the death of the laptop threw me off-balance. I'll get it to you on Monday. Hope you saw that blog on serial writing; I think that should answer your questions.Pat C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10531462055912377327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-72319285744382440582011-09-30T14:00:44.201-05:002011-09-30T14:00:44.201-05:00First I have to type it onto the laptop to make it...First I have to type it onto the laptop to make it emailable. I know what I'll be doing next week.<br /><br />I think I know what the problem may be. The bad guy maneuvers the leads into a no-win situation. Instead of them confronting him, the male lead arranges for a third party to come in and deal with the bad guy while he protects the woman. Hence, there's never any direct confrontation between good guys and bad guy. Like Star Wars, where Luke and Darth don't face off until the second movie.<br /><br />I think that's what's bothering me. My comic-book-trained mind wants the female lead to face off against the bad guy, even though I know she wouldn't win. She and the hero are miles away when the bad guy gets what's coming to him. I'm going to go ahead and send it out anyway and see what Siren's editors say.<br /><br />In fact, that might be an interesting experiment. I'll send it to them AND you guys, then compare editorial notes and see if we all agree. That'll give us an idea of our collective editing skills for when we start pubbing the Talbot's Peak stories.<br /><br />At least the bad guy dies on camera. Another lesson from comic books: if you don't see a body, they're not really dead.Pat C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10531462055912377327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8850524524995973615.post-71695369486500334132011-09-29T19:26:04.665-05:002011-09-29T19:26:04.665-05:00Pat, if you want, I'll read it and see if I ca...Pat, if you want, I'll read it and see if I can offer anything useful.Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.com